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Muffit · November 20th, 2004, 08:55 AM

Way coolish Julix!!

julix · November 20th, 2004, 12:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Muffit

Way coolish Julix!!

Thank you Muffit(my computer won't let me do the smiles right now)Heart and rose and smile.......lol

bsg1fan1975 · November 22nd, 2004, 11:47 AM

nice!

julix · November 22nd, 2004, 01:35 PM

Here is my first poem not about grief and pain....

I will never forget
the way your eyes
cut through me
right down to
my very soul
a moment so filled
with a kind of
mesmorizing gaze
I have never experienced
before or since
piercing me like
the point of a knife
cutting through
the self-protecting
illusional armour
flesh then bone
leaving a lasting mark
never to fade
always having
a place deep
within me

julix · November 22nd, 2004, 01:39 PM

Thanks Bsg

martok2112 · November 22nd, 2004, 01:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by julix

Here is my first poem not about grief and pain....

I will never forget
the way your eyes
cut through me
right down to
my very soul
a moment so filled
with a kind of
mesmorizing gaze
I have never experienced
before or since
piercing me like
the point of a knife
cutting through
the self-protecting
illusional armour
flesh then bone
leaving a lasting mark
never to fade
always having
a place deep
within me

Very nice, Julix.

Martok2112

shiningstar · November 22nd, 2004, 02:58 PM

Beautiful Julix! Keep writing

julix · November 22nd, 2004, 03:34 PM

Thanks Martok and Shingingstar....I am glad you liked it

amberstar · November 22nd, 2004, 06:59 PM

I really enjoy your poems sis......hope you keep writing.

Archangel · November 23rd, 2004, 06:52 AM

Keep it up, Julix!

repcisg · November 23rd, 2004, 08:49 AM

this is good stuff!

julix · November 24th, 2004, 03:30 PM

Amber,Archangel, and Repcisg,

Thank you so much for you kind words and support

It means so much to me.......

julix · January 13th, 2005, 06:22 AM

soft faded colors
a deep trance
a figure fuzzy
in the distance
a slow gait
which comes to me
features now clearer
white light and
flickers of my eye
a face which
stops my heart
filled with a mixture
of love and grief
trying to hold on
to a memory
forcing myself to feel
wanting the joy
and trying to hold on
happiness and pain mix
together at once

repcisg · January 13th, 2005, 12:29 PM

I can see it clearly, oh fond memory.

gmd3d · January 13th, 2005, 01:46 PM

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soft faded colors
a deep trance
a figure fuzzy
in the distance
a slow gait
which comes to me
features now clearer
white light and
flickers of my eye
a face which
stops my heart
filled with a mixture
of love and grief
trying to hold on
to a memory
forcing myself to feel
wanting the joy
and trying to hold on
happiness and pain mix
together at once

I like this one julix, for many reasons.

julix · January 14th, 2005, 07:10 AM

Thanks rep and Taranis......
I really appreciate the feedback!!!!

Taranis do you mind telling me more about what things you did like....It just helps to have feedback. Thank you both so much!

julix · January 26th, 2005, 05:57 AM

Here is another poem...I am not real happy with this one...but any feedback is appreciated

A long journey
It seems
Hard and vast
Treacherous
So many obstacles
Which only taunt me
As I feel
I will never find
The end, my goal
So far away
Unattainable
It seems
As I continue to climb
I feel doubt and fear
Confusion
Can I make it?
I stumble and fall
Yet again like
so many times before
do I dare get up again?
And if I do where
Do I turn?
The path is not clear
There is no map
No compass
No help
I am alone in my quest

Archangel · January 26th, 2005, 06:32 AM

It's good. I'm pretty sure most of us have felt that way at one time or another.

julix · January 26th, 2005, 06:49 AM

Thanks Arch......It is great to see ya. It seems I hardly do anymore

Archangel · January 26th, 2005, 07:01 AM

Probably timing.

For the time being, I'm not on at nights anymore.

julix · January 26th, 2005, 07:27 AM

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Originally Posted by Archangel

Probably timing.

For the time being, I'm not on at nights anymore.

ahhhh...that would explain it. can I be nosey and ask why??? Well I guess I did ask

can you answer....you don't have too

onepath · January 26th, 2005, 07:30 AM

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Originally Posted by julix

Here is another poem...I am not real happy with this one...but any feedback is appreciated

A long journey
It seems
Hard and vast
Treacherous
So many obstacles
Which only taunt me
As I feel
I will never find
The end, my goal
So far away
Unattainable
It seems
As I continue to climb
I feel doubt and fear
Confusion
Can I make it?
I stumble and fall
Yet again like
so many times before
do I dare get up again?
And if I do where
Do I turn?
The path is not clear
There is no map
No compass
No help
I am alone in my quest

i think those words are v v well written, i too have writen a whole book of poems for my loved ones back home while im away in the desert

gmd3d · January 26th, 2005, 02:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by julix

Here is another poem...I am not real happy with this one...but any feedback is appreciated

A long journey
It seems
Hard and vast
Treacherous
So many obstacles
Which only taunt me
As I feel
I will never find
The end, my goal
So far away
Unattainable
It seems
As I continue to climb
I feel doubt and fear
Confusion
Can I make it?
I stumble and fall
Yet again like
so many times before
do I dare get up again?
And if I do where
Do I turn?
The path is not clear
There is no map
No compass
No help
I am alone in my quest

I like this .. its where I am at this moment in time... have some decissions to make and soon..? the thing about been alone is ..you are..even in a crowded room your thoughts and concerns flooding your mind... without rest.. relentless thought beating there way into your mind..and your traped behind the shell of your mind..

just my thoughts on your poem...and where it fits in with me at this time..

Archangel · January 27th, 2005, 07:29 AM

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Originally Posted by julix

ahhhh...that would explain it. can I be nosey and ask why??? Well I guess I did ask

can you answer....you don't have too

No big secret.

Until I get back to work (this spring) I'm on a public computer. The owners may be a little offended if I sneak in after-hours.

julix · January 28th, 2005, 06:54 AM

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Originally Posted by Archangel

No big secret.

Until I get back to work (this spring) I'm on a public computer. The owners may be a little offended if I sneak in after-hours.

ahhh...just checking into those clandestine angelic activites

julix · January 28th, 2005, 07:01 AM

There is a wound
so deep it
hits the core
burried and raw
festering
no type of medicine
can heal
the deep twisting
pain within
created long ago
the injury
invisible to all
who gaze at me
the hole deep inside is
undetetable
but ever present
a constant torment
which never retreats
The pain of living a
life unloved
by the most important
person in the world
ME

julix · January 30th, 2005, 08:05 AM

Looking from the outside in
what appears?
I don't know what
the reflection shows
If the image were stable
instead of a flickering light
could it be then
a true statement
would be found

Searching for the light
a way to make things
make sense
seem complete
comming together
to create a harmony
never before
felt or seen

julix · February 19th, 2005, 06:59 PM

I have a favor to ask I am gonna submit 2 or 3 poems to a contest.......can I have some feedback on which ones you all think are the best????

I would really, really appriciate it...............

amberstar · February 19th, 2005, 07:47 PM

I'm not good at picking what may do well in a contest, but these three are my favorite

First poem on post #20

Second poem on post #19

and the poem on post #43

Good luck with the contest, I'm rooting for you sis

julix · February 20th, 2005, 06:06 PM

Thanks Sis..............

anyone else want to put their opinions in?????Please